- March 8, 2019 at 4:34 am #394360
- March 8, 2019 at 9:11 am #394397
- March 8, 2019 at 9:18 am #394400
Unfortunately, as the brightest highlight area my eyes are immediately drawn to the clipped whites of the net and some of the background details. The fisherman appears rather ‘dark’ and muted in comparison with shadowing to the face. The whites of the eyes in particular have become lost in the shadow of the eye sockets but could be recoverable with a different edit. (I will leave this to fellow sharks with more expertise than I).
I think this would be a stronger portrait with a cleaner background. As it is there are a number of distractions, notably the bright horizontal line exiting his back, the right angle highlight from shoulder to just above the eye line and the partially obscured forklift. As previously mentioned there are also some areas of background clipping top right of frame.
Interesting character but a case of needing to start with the background and then work forward when composing the shot.
- March 8, 2019 at 4:48 pm #394481
I'm pretty confident had there been a better angle you would have used it so its just making the best of what you had. Had it been an old wooden boat in the background it would be seen as context and OK but a fork truck poses other problems. Can you maybe make the background lighter with more blur on the offending item?
- March 8, 2019 at 6:13 pm #394486
Thanks for commenting. I agree about the forklift. It was a difficult location and it was not a portrait shoot. I was on a recce, saw him at work, decided on an f/1.2 or f/1.4 aperture to get the most bokeh and snapped. That is no excuse, it is just how it was.
Here is another angle I tried. f/1.2
- This reply was modified 1 week, 4 days ago by Erik Fransman.
- March 8, 2019 at 7:32 pm #394489
Of the two shots presented, I prefer No. 2. It has less background distractions than does No.1 . (Less is more?) The worker's line of sight, (an implied leading line), and the leading line of the repair rope from his hand to the net, both lead the viewer's eyes to the work, which I take to be the subject of this photo. I don't know if it would have been achievable but a little more blurring of the background without losing the sparse DOF of the net might have helped this photo. The bright white rectangles under the man's right arm snag my eye and could be removed in post without too much difficulty . I like the idea and the basic composition but IMHO and with 20-20 hindsight the photo could have been improved
- March 9, 2019 at 3:30 am #394541
I think this is a much stronger shot and works well in a tight, simplified, square format. I like the direction of gaze towards the net and the line provides a nice diagonal into frame. A more natural shot overall with fewer distractions although the bright highlights underneath his arm need to be cloned out. Exposure is much stronger and I like that we can see the details on his face.
- March 9, 2019 at 4:43 pm #394607
Hi there @erik-fransman, for me the second shot is better due to its candidness. Maybe a wider crop could feel less constrained, and maybe you could pull of some details from the shadows if his clothes. Other than that, this is a good one. I must say, you could start doing a small essay about this sort of manual work.
- March 9, 2019 at 6:42 pm #394613
Frederico, here's a wider version, below one more in org color.
- March 9, 2019 at 6:43 pm #394615
- March 11, 2019 at 8:52 am #394857
I prefer the 2nd b&w that you posted out of all the versions.
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